I am full of imaginatioin about the sky since I was very young,I imagin that someday I could fly in the sky by driving a plane,far from the surface and close to the clouds,overlooking the moutains and lakes.
Today, I have a chance here that can make my dreams come true.To become a pilot of Shenzhen Airlines.I know it would be a long way for me till i became a experienced driver,but I determine to devote all myself to this objective.
妳覺得哪句不合適，我調整壹下。
妳第二段用法問題有點多，我沒給妳列出來，給妳寫了壹段，妳最好查查字典，理解壹下，因為妳原來那個說法，說出去漏洞百出，別嫌我說得不好聽，妳不是要過面試嗎，最好聽取別人的建議。
Goodmorning, i'm glad to be here for this interview, now let me in troduce myself, my name is MaJi, 22 years old now, i graduated from...in july.2014.
There are there members in my family. My father ,my mother and I。i'm the only son, we all love our family。 my father have a stone factory,（不知道妳這個Stone factory是不是采礦工廠的意思，但是正常應該說：mining factory） and my mother is a housewife, she has to stay at home and deal with the housework everyday(我知道妳想表達妳媽媽是家庭主婦，總呆在家裏，但是stay inside的意思是‘在。。。裏面’的意思，沒有‘在家裏’的意思。stay at home才是).i have a very happy family.
下面的怎麽翻譯：
我享受這份工作，而不用再為我要做什麽工作而苦惱（what should i working for）而苦惱； 我對即將到來的工作充滿了熱情。
I will enjoy this job，without worrying about what i should work for。I am full of pasion to embrace it。