我是壹個幽默的男孩,說壹句話就能把妳逗笑。我是壹個不會退縮的男孩，不管遇到什麽困難都不放棄。我也有缺點。我是壹個愛哭的男孩，受到挫折只哭。我是壹個粗心的男孩，幹什麽都粗心。這就是我。名師點評：以寫詩的形式來介紹自己的性格特點，立意非常新穎。詩中，小作者不僅介紹了自己的優點，還介紹了自己的缺點，塑造出了壹個幽默、勇敢、愛哭又有些粗心的男孩子形象。詩歌條理清楚，主題明確，但節奏不是很鮮明，讀起來沒有詩歌的韻味。小作者還需細細推敲，在遣詞造句上要註意詩歌整體上的節奏。“受到挫折只哭”建議改為“受到挫折只會 I am a good boy, say a word can make you laugh. I am a boy would not back down, no matter what difficulties will not give up. I also have shortcomings. I am a loving crying boy, frustration, just cry. I am a careless boy, what is careless. This is me. The teacher commented: to write the introduction comes in the form of their own character, a very novel. The poem, the not only introduced the advantages of their own, also introduced their own shortcomings, to create a sense of humor, brave, love crying and careless boy image. Poetry is clear, a clear theme, but the rhythm is not very bright, to read without poetry style. The need to carefully, in wording and phrasing should pay attention to the rhythm of poetry. " A setback only cry" proposal to change the" setback will only